Spar with Revan
Submitted by Via on September 26, 2007 - 10:12pm.
"When is she going to stop sparring with Revan? What about my turn? And the others? They want to spar with Revan too..." Atton scratched his head.
"Why is it so hard to defeat you, Revan!"
P.S: Nevermind that Atton there. He's just my sketch victim.
Nice
You've conveyed a good sense of movement here, which fits nicely with the idea of sparring. (Sheesh, listen to me trying to sound like I know anything about art...) Your lightsabers are very well done: the proportions seem just right, and I particularly like Revan's hands holding them. The contrasting colors and the stripey background are also rather nice. And no, Atton doesn't belong there, but you did a good job with him nonetheless.
I must say, however, that it looks like the Exile just impaled herself. I think it's because you've got her and her lightsaber in direct profile. Also, her face seems a bit off somehow. But that's just me -- I can barely manage stick figures!
Good work!
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Well done
It deffinitely conveys movement. But I agree with Sir Boss. The profile of the Exile looks odd. I think it's because her chin and forehead protrude a little bit. And it does kinda look like Exile is impaling herself. But Revan is very well done. She looks like she's winning...the exile looks kinda frustrated ya know?
Nice work!!
Nice work!! The lightsabers look great. Revan looks completely unruffled, like she hasn't even broken a sweat. And the exile looks tired and frustrated.
I noticed previous reviewers have mentioned her profile. It appears that the problem lies with her neck being too far forward. It lines up with the same plane as her forehead. Moving the neck back to 2/3 of the way between the hair and forehead (still cloer to the front than the back) would help, plus maybe opening her mouth wider, which would make her lower jaw/chin smaller. And perhaps rotating her chin just a bit (clockwise) to bring it in a little.
Aside from the jaw, they are both excellent!!! (as is the exile on your friendster profile, will you be submitting her?!) I love your style. And the colors you choose are well-matched to the game and each other. :D
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Agreed
I already repaired the exile, but not enough I see, yeah, the neck is too forward. >.<
Thank you for the comments. ^^