Coming Home

Disclaimer: I don't own KotOR, or anything related to KotOR. This is just a one-shot story mostly about RevanxCarth. It's the first REAL story I've written about KotOR that I've actually taken seriously ^^;

Hope you like it.

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Revan

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"And just where do you think you are headed off to?" A raspy voice greeted me, almost quivering. I froze in my place. I had all of my bags packed, my hair pulled up in its usual clumsy pony tail, clad in my every day Jedi robes. Ready to leave. But not ready to say goodbye to the ones I loved. Its why I selected this time of the night. To make it easy, or so I had believed. I couldn't move from my spot with him here.

"I'm.. I'm sorry, Carth.. I didn't mean to wake you.. I wanted to.."

"Wanted to what, Revan? Wanted to leave, just when things are starting to look up? Why are you doing this to me?" His expression was more than showing what he felt- sorrow, love, and confusion. I didn't need to use force powers to know what he felt. He looked like he was about to fall apart. He knew what I was doing, why I was out here. But he didn't know where I was going or why I was going there. I took a deep breath of air, remembering why I needed to leave, and what it meant leaving behind. They Jedi on the outer rim needed me, our brothers and sisters in danger. If they didn't hold out for as long as the Republic needed, we were all doomed. But I didn't have any clue what we are up against, and what it would cost me. I would be leaving Carth, abandoning my true love.. And happiness. I'm pretty sure it was worth it though. Wasn't it? I never could make the right choice when it came to big decisions. I always winded up being miserable anyways. 'Hopefully, if I left he could find love.. Again. And I can die out there and no one would miss me. Mission got over Taris, her home planet after it was bombed, she could get over me easily. Bastila didn't have any real attachments to me, did she? Her serene Jedi composure would make her forget about me.' I know I'm trying to fool myself, but, hey, it was working. Suddenly I couldn't breathe. I was choking, trying to force back the tears, but my attempt to keep them down was in vain. I could feel the tears burning in my eyes, my throat itching. 'I can't let them do this to me, I'm stronger than this.. I can do this..' Oh, who am I to kid. I can't live without them. Without any of them. I took a shaky breath and tried to sound as calm as possible. Still, I need to go. Even if I die out there, and going won't change much, I need to do what I can. It's the right thing to do. 'But I remember saying something like that a few years back when the Mandalorian Wars started..'

"Carth.. I can't.. I haft to go. They have called me, they need me. I am their only hope." I know I sounded stupid, but I didn't even plan for anyone to find out, so I was clueless to know what to tell him. Its not like I knew this would happen or anything. "I had hoped you would all be asleep.. It would be easier that way.. Easier to leave." Carth rushed to me, grasping my shoulders with both hands. My heart skipped a beat. "So you just wanted to leave? Without saying goodbye? If this threat is so dangerous, why not take someone with you? What if you die out there and nobody knows it? What if you never come back?" His eyes looked deep into mine, searching them. It was like he was questioning my love for him. I could feel him, it was like he was peeking into my core. I couldn't bear it, the pain.. This man had my heart in his hands. What was I supposed to do? I had to go. Those people.. The Republic.. They were all doomed if I didn't leave as soon as I could. I averted my gaze from his, accidentally allowing a small tear to slide down my cheek. He rubbed his thumb over my cheek, brushing it away. We stood there a moment, unmoving. After a few moments he sighed and stroked his hands through my hair, making it fall out of my messy pony tail. "I've always liked you having your hair down." He rubbed his fingers through my long ebony strands of hair. I felt his long, course fingers rubbing my long strands of hair.. I didn't want to leave. It was the last thing I wanted, and what he was doing wasn't helping me muster up any more willpower to leave. "I don't want to loose you, you are too important to me, Beautiful. At least.. At least take me with you." He pleaded.

"Carth.. I haft to leave, the Republic, its doomed if I don't leave now. I wish it could have been a different way. I wish a different person could have this responsibility. I would give anything.. Anything.. Just to stay with you. But we know it can't be like that. I can't take you with me, I will be in constant danger.. We both know that if you die, I have a greater chance at falling. I promise I will come back. Someday. I willl return. I can't live without you, Flyboy. I.. I love you so much." I tried to smile a bit, and turned my head back to face him. "I have made this promise to you, and I will never break it. But.. I need you to make me a promise." He literally froze in his place, stilled by my doing. He stood unmoving by the Force Stasis I laid on him. Tears fell freely down my cheeks as I looked into his eyes. "I want you to promise me that you will keep the Republic strong. At least until I return. Find another love, if possible.." The tears that fell from my eyes soon fell from his, falling gingerly the side of his cheek. I brushed them away, rubbing my palm on his cheek and jaw, where I rested the tip of my hand. "But never forget.. I will always love you, and you alone." I hugged him close, pecked his lips once, then turned to my bag.

I only looked back once. His eyes burned with sadness, longing, but I closed my eyes shut. Our bond allowed me to read his thoughts, and feelings. Waves of sadness and remorse, love and passion hit me hard. He wished to gather me in his arms, to hold me, at least once more. He swore to me, he would wait. "No other woman.. I love you, and you alone. I will wait a life time. Oh, Force, I'll wait two life times, just come back to me in one piece. I'll be waiting. I love you, oh, Force, I love you so much. Goodbye, Revan."

"Goodbye, Carth Onasi." I fingered the trinket around my neck, feeling the small, precious words engraved on the surface under my thumb, and then I turned away, to my Ebon Hawk, out of Coruscant, away from the Core Worlds, to the Outer Rim. To where my destiny lay.

Not two weeks after I had left Coruscant, I found out that I was pregnant.

Personal friends of mine helped me through the hard time, which I found when I was on planet Adega on the Outer Rim. They were orphans, their parents killed by Mandalorians. I felt the Force whirling around them both like hurricanes. I couldn't help but bring them along. The eldest of the siblings -Jacob, who was 14, became my apprentice as soon as I won his trust over. His sister, Jade, age 10, took a while to become used to me. They missed their parents deeply. They aided me greatly, especially with my baby. It was nice having them along, knowing someone could back me up if the going got rough made me feel safe. I felt a reluctance to love them, in fear that they would be killed, or worse, but they were clever and crafty, always stuck together. They took better care of themselves than I ever could, especially after I trained them in the Force. I loved them like my own children. I knew it was wrong of me, but I couldn't help myself. Once I reached half-way to my destination, I had to let go of the Ebon Hawk for another ship. I couldn't risk being found. By Sith or Carth Onasi.

Four years later, I met Jenna Skye and Atton Rand. Sent by the Republic. They had a message from Carth Onasi, saying he was still waiting for me.

'Wait a little while longer, my love. I'll keep true to my promise.'

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Two years later

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The pilot turned around and greeted me as I walked in through the cockpits' door in our little ship known as The Fury. We had been out in space for weeks, picking our way back to the Core Worlds. Imparticularly Coruscant.. we were only a few hours away now. We hadn't contacted anyone there yet, for the element of surprise, I told them. I have been anticipating this journey for months, years, even. "How far are we from our destination, Jacob?" I asked.

"We'll get there as soon as you stop asking me, Rev. Geez, you have waited almost six years, you can wait at least a few more hours." I knew he was right, even though he was only joking. I sighed and checked the navi-computer to check on our course, then turned around and trudged out. I walked down the hall, nodded to the few people I saw, Jen, Atton, and Jade, Jacob's little sister. I walked right past the 'fresher and straight into the 'Girls' Dorm'. I smiled as I saw the familiar tiny sleeping form on the small bed that was literally covered in pink and white. I smiled a bit. I thought about what would happen when I reached home as I absently bent over a small container and pulled out a light pink skirt and a tiny blouse. I sat down on the bed and urged the sleeping girl to wake up, rubbing the small of her back with my palm. She stirred for a moment, then rubbed her eyes with a sleepy gesture. She poked her head straight up, and I smiled down at her lovingly, like a good mother always did.

"Morning, Mommy." My little Alora, looked up at me with those precious violet eyes, which she inherited from me. "Morning, Allie." I pushed her dark hair out of her face, and started helping her out of her night clothes and into the piece of wardrobe I had selected for her today. "Mommy, can you do my hair for me?" I smiled and went digging through my bag for hair clips. "Of course! How do want it done, love?" I winked at her and she giggled.

"I want mine done just like you do yours!" She proclaimed. I bent down on one knee behind her as she looked into the mirror, a huge smile on her face. I fluffed her hair out, hanging it down. When I was done I pulled her into my chest and kissed her on her tiny cheek, making her giggle again. When she was all ready and dressed up pretty, she looked into the looking glass again, and twirled around in her skirt. "Mommy, this is my nice skirt! Why am I wearing this one?" Confusion lighting her face, she tilted her head, eyeing me. She got most of her traits from me, but she got this one from Carth, definitely. She was very smart, not one thing went by her, very wary.

I sighed, and knelt down next to her again. "It's a surprise, and I don't want to ruin it for you. But when we get there, I want you to stay next to Mommy. Okay?" I asked. She tilted her head to the side, allowing two strands of disobedient hair to fall down her forehead. I saw her delicate brow furrow as she slowly nodded her head. I smiled and lifted her up onto my hip, and walked out the door, ebony hair flailing behind us. I ran her into the cockpit and set her down next to Jacob.

"Heya, l'il lady!" He smiled a scoundrel smile at the little girl, which made her giggle, clutching her arms to her chest. He learned it from Atton about a year and a half ago, and he always used the smile when he was talking to Alora. I let out a low laugh, which sounded more like it was filled with anxiety than filled with joy. I told him to watch her for me, then I turned around and left to go get dressed myself. I rounded the corner, listening to a little girl squeal and giggle and a man laugh at her reaction to his playing. I went back into the 'Girls' Dorm', and pulled out my own choice of clothing. It was a delicate light purple blouse, and a long jet-black skirt. I yanked my hair out of its messy pony tail, letting it flow down in a particular way. I dug through one of my bags for a few minutes, looking through it. I needed something. Something that would complete my look. I dug through everything, then I found what I wanted. I pulled out a chain, it was silver, a locket. It was in a heart shape, and engraved on the front of it was 'I love you, Gorgeous. I always will - Flyboy '.

He had given this locket to me about one week prior to my leaving. I gazed down at it for some time, and opened it slowly. In one slot, was a picture of the love of my life, my Carth. He had a huge smile on his face, with two small strings of auburn hair resting on his forehead, reliably. I looked at the other picture, a picture of myself. 'Force,' I thought, 'I haven't looked that happy in years..' I looked at the picture, that woman's face was beaming with joy. 'That's about the time I got pregnant...' I rubbed my stomach at the thought. Oh, Force, what if he found someone else? What if I will ruin the chance he has at finding love after me, by suddenly coming back? With a daughter, no less. His daughter. I didn't know I would have a child.. I love him, he hast to love me. Right?

I knew it was selfish of me to think this way, but I couldn't help it. This is why people turn to the Dark Side. I might not even see him. What if the war had spread back to the Core Worlds? What if he is..

I couldn't bring myself to think of it.

I felt hot tears stream down my face, I covered my mouth, and closed my eyes shut. He loves me... He told me he did... He promised he would wait... He is alive and well, and waiting for me. He hast to be.

My tears streamed down my face and into my lap, where the locket lay. I wiped my eyes with my sleeve and walked up to a mirror. I brushed my hair back and hooked the necklace onto my neck snugly. I took a step back and observed myself in the mirror. I hadn't changed a bit. Sure, I looked a bit worn out, but nothing beyond that had changed. Not even my hair, still as black as midnight, no gray.

I was interrupted by someone knocking on my door. I yelled for them to go ahead and come in, and Jade walked in. She was about 15 and a half, her hair was a light blonde. Petite and very shy, but, I trained her well. Heh. She packs a powerful punch, I'm really proud of her.

"Rev, we have reached our destination. Are you ready?" She threw me a look of worry, but I nodded my head. I took a deep breath, then headed out of the room and down the hall. They were all waiting for me, and I mashed the button that released the door. I grabbed my daughter's hand and we all stepped out onto Coruscant. It was around noon, we had arrived a bit late. I sighed.

"I guess we will haft to wait until morning to spread our news.. I'll get us a room for the night." I started off towards some apartments, albeit reluctantly, as Allie, Jacob, and Jade trailed behind me, while Atton and Jenna stayed behind to pay certain landing fees. I was disappointed. It wasn't exactly night time, but there was a lot of things to do before I could see.. Him.. I had to pack up all of our stuff in a few hotel rooms, get everyone settled, and we needed dinner. And it would take over half the day to see 'Admiral Onasi'. I would haft to make an appointment with him. I couldn't stay focused, I was thinking about them.. Wondering what they had been doing since I had left for the Unknown Regions.. All that whistled through my thoughts was that they could hate me for leaving him like I did. But still.. I was glad to be home. Carth had achieved the rank of Admiral, as well. He was doing well. I whimpered softly, and wished that nothing bad had happened while I was away. I turned my attention to the little girl at my side. She had never been in a big city.. Or seen her father.. She was in for a pretty exciting week. I smiled and lifted her up on my hip as we made our way to the hotel.

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Carth

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I sighed, and leaned back in my chair to get comfortable. "Paper work, paper work.." I lifted up a stack of papers. Guess what was under it. "Oh! Look! More paper work!" I rolled my eyes. Being an Admiral isn't all its made out to be. I rubbed my face with my hands. Pinching the bridge of my nose with my fingers, I leaned forward in my chair, groaning with all the work I had to get finished. With no warning, my wrist watch started beeping enthusiastically, and I groaned when I realized what it meant. I had a 'date'. "Peh, wasn't even my idea." Isn't it supposed to be the 'Man' that asks the 'Woman' out to dinner? In my case, the woman Clair has been fawning over me ever since she laid eyes on me. Or perhaps, it was my *money* she was fawning over. Either way, apparently I had to buy her dinner tonight, and how that happened, I shall never know. I jumped up out of my seat and started out the door of my office. I waved or saluted people who I passed, some saying 'Night Mr. Onasi' or some of the younger people whistling, saying something about a 'hot date'. A sad sigh escaped my lips as I made my way to my apartment, thinking about Revan.. 'She has been on my mind quite a lot lately.. I'll ask Bastila later if it means anything.' I tried to focus on the date I had tonight. Although, it wasn't my idea. I couldn't help myself though, I found myself thinking about her.. Her deep violet eyes, her long, ebony hair. I imagined running my fingers through her hair, like I used to always do.. I could.. Feel her. Her presence, its like she was here. I shook my head ruefully. Reality settled in as I realized that she wasn't really here.

But, I knew one thing, and no matter how much I didn't want to go, I had a date.

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At the restaurant

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I helped her get seated, then went around the table to my seat. We were at a very expensive restaurant. But of course, I had to act like I didn't mind. I looked her over, either she was trying to dazzle me, or she was just showing a bit *too* much skin. In any case, she had holes in her dress that had been purposefully placed there, it seemed, and the dress itself looked very expensive. Her short dark brown hair was pulled up on top of her head. She was gazing at me, which was making me uncomfortable. Time to start the small talk...

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Revan

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After we had settled in, put our clothes up and all, I said I wanted to give them real food. We had been eating Jenna's 'special recipes' for about 5 months. At least it wasn't Jolee's cooking. I smiled to myself. Getting back to business, I gathered up a bunch of credits, made sure everyone looked their best, and we set out to find a decent place to eat.


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Carth

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We chatted for a few minutes, she ordered Corellian wine, I asked for just plain water. I ordered an appetizer, although when it came we only pecked respectfully at it. I was trying to avoid conversation, mostly. Oh, and she tried to start a lot of them. She really tried. I still avoided them, in a polite manner, mind you.

One thing led to another, but the thing that was most horrific, was that some reel from Alderaan was heard from the band, just making the woman beam with joy. She ushered me up, and we started dancing. It wasn't a heated dance, but we were dancing fast. Skillfully, we twirled back and forth, and for one moment, just a moment, I was reminded of a time Revan and I had shared. It had been late at night, on the Unknown Planet where the Republic was commemorating the crew of the Ebon Hawk for the great deeds we had done on the Star Forge mission. We had a celebratory party afterward, and me and Revan had danced like this. Dancing, twirling, spinning in passion on the dance floor. I looked into her eyes, and I saw my beloved Revan. Her eyes sparkling a sweet lavender, her hair glistening in the light, swirling with each movement. Force, I even smelled a hint Revan's perfume. Oh, how I missed her so much. I blinked once, and the song had ended. We came to a tragic hault, she was in my arms, we were both panting, and I didn't see Clair. I saw Revan. I smiled gingerly at her, and, as always, she returned the gesture. I forgot about everything, about Revan leaving, about how Clair wanted to use me for money, but most of all.. That I was holding Clair, not Revan. The 'Revan' I was holding leaned up, and gave me a passionate kiss, which soon, I returned. I was so caught up in what I was doing, I didn't realise that this was Clair until I heard a woman's high heals running, each step echoing in the still room, each sharp step a pain in my heart. A door closed. I backed up, pushed the woman off of me, and shook my head, trying to clear my thoughts. I touched my temples, and tried to relax. I betrayed Revan. I looked around the room, expecting all eyes to be on me, but all I saw was two beautiful violet ones, scorning me. But it wasn't that of my beloved. It was.. A small child? The child's eyes watered, and she squeezed them shut, and pushed her head into a woman's skirt. I looked up at the woman. Bright blue eyes, scorned me now, it was.. The Exile? Skye? I took a good look at her, but she started to stomp out, with Atton, another man which he didn't recognize, a girl, and the little girl with the violet eyes. I grabbed Jen's arm.

"Let go of me!" She hissed. When I didn't let go of her, Atton stepped in front of me.

"Let go of her. Now." Atton warned. I dropped her arm. There was so many things I wanted to ask them, so many things I needed to know.

"Did you find Revan?" It was the first one to come to mind. The only answer I got was a slap in the face. I rubbed my cheek sorely.

"Did we find Revan!? Why should you even care!?" Jenna's eyes were flaming at him, daring him. The little girl cowered in fear behind her legs, sobbing.

"I.. I didn't realize.. Wait.. Who is this little girl?" This little girl reminded me so much of her. Her eyes, her hair, her.. Force, she even walked like Revan. But I betrayed Revan. My stomach twisted in disgust with myself.

She huffed at me. "You shouldn't care about this little girl. If you don't care about Revan, you don't care about Allie. You were too busy makin' out with that.. That schutta over there to even bother noticing us." She shot a menacing look towards Clair, who was dumbfounded and slowly stumbling her way towards the exit in the back. "She saw you dancing with her, and I could literally feel her heart sink... But when you kissed her.. Why did you do it, you moron? Why did you haft to break her heart?"

"What.. What do you mean?" My head was spinning.

"Duh! You di'kutla! Revan just ran away! You crushed her, Carth." Jen shook her head angrily. Atton put a protective arm around her.

My breath caught in my throat. Revan was here on Coruscant.

And she saw me with another woman.

Oh, Force.. "I need to find her."

"Oh, please. Why should you need to find her? You have already replaced her!" The woman sure had fire, I can tell you.

I grimaced, and pushed beyond them, out the doorway, down the street. Looking for her.

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Revan

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I ran, down the streets, past alley ways, just.. Running. The memory replaying over and over in my mind.. He looked at her like he.. With so much passion.. I couldn't bear it all. After a while of running, it started raining. I was drenched in the water that fell from the skies above Coruscant, and I didn't care. I started shivering, but it didn't matter. All that mattered was that he didn't wait for me. My eyes watered, but it didn't matter. No one would see it anyways. I was just glad he didn't see me. I made it out the door before he could spot me, so he didn't even know I was there. At least I didn't ruin his life.

I found myself stumbling off the side of a curb, busting my lip, making it bleed. It was over, I thought I could stay here with my love, but I had been mislead. I looked pretty pitiful. I laughed to myself, humorlessly, getting more and more soaked by the second. I could either stay out here, run forever, leave everything and everyone behind, or I could go back, and stay where I didn't belong.

I wasn't paying enough attention to my surroundings. I was too worried about my dilemma to realize I was being followed. I noticed it at the last second, but I was too late. The next thing I knew, a tall man clad in a dark hood was trying to attack me. I cursed myself. This was the only time I forgot to bring a weapon. Well, I didn't mind this. It was a lot better alternative than going back and facing... Him. I dodged the man for a while, twisting, ducking, diving; not having enough energy to call upon the Force; until he finally got a blow through to me - He kicked me off my feet, and I twisted in the air a bit so I landed face first on the ground. I felt a crack in my back, and winced. I could feel him getting closer, I heard something being unsheathed. Oh, Frack.

I didn't have a second to react, and the dagger was penetrating from my back. I felt blood trickle off the side of the back, and I gasped for air. It was hard to breathe. I felt sweet unconsciousness sweeping over me, when I heard a blaster bolt, and a large thump, followed by rapid footsteps coming closer to me, splashing in the rain and blood that was now puddling on the ground. Either I was seeing things, or Carth was standing over me, trying to grasp me in his arms. I heard someone saying something, but their cries were drowned out. I couldn't feel anything, I went numb, and everything slipped out of focus.

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Carth

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I felt it as she went limp in my arms, but I knew she wasn't dead yet. She was way too stubborn to give up that easily. I ran several blocks, I could barely breathe, partly from running, partly from... I was holding her again.. She kept her promise. But I didn't keep mine.. I promised she was the only one for me.. How could I have been so stupid!? Just seeing her alive.. If she can hold on until I reach the medical facilities. Oh, how I had missed her.. But now wasn't the time. I had to get her to a hospital. 'C'mon Beautiful.. You haft to stay with me!' I begged with her over and over to stay alive, keep breathing. I finally reached my destination, bursting through the door. The Nurse there recognized me immediately, but before she could question why I was here, she looked at the blood dripping from the lifeless woman in my arms. She ran to us, calling for help. It all happend so swiftly, all I remember is holding Revan's hand as she was rushed into a Kolto Tank. They stripped her down to her unmentionables, and carefully placed her into the tank.

I gazed at the tank for hours, her wounds healing slowly the longer she was in there. After twelve hours of waiting, they removed her from the tank, and I helped them lay her down in a soft bed. I stayed by her bedside all night, not moving once. I had my hand clasped in hers, the other stroaking her hair back. She kept it down today. I smiled. 'She only ever kept it down if I asked her to.' She was expecting to see me today. Just not like this. I sighed. I was exhausted. I laid my head down partly on her pillow, my arm absently slipping under her, pulling her close to me.

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Revan

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Everything came as a shock. I woke up with a start, propping myself up with my elbows. I looked around the room.. I was in a hospital. 'Allie!' I called to her. She and I had a bond, I could feel her and the turmoil inside her. It took a few minutes for her to respond, my shout caused a bit of a shock. 'Mommy! Your okay! We've been so worried! Who was that man that went with you, mommy? I don't know who he is. Do you know him?' I didn't know what she was talking about. It took me a few minutes to realize what happened. 'Someone saved me? Who?' I soon realized who it was when I felt someone stirring beside me. My breath caught in my throat as I gazed down at Carth, who I realized had one arm under me and supporting me. I gazed at his face.. His eyes were puffy, dark circles under them although he was asleep. 'What had happened while I was out?' Apparently I had caused Carth much grief. I let Allie know that I knew him. I felt relief rushing through her. I looked back at Carth, sadness striking my core. I felt him stir again and his lips started to quiver, as if he was going to say something.

"I'm sorry.. Beautiful.. Please.. Forgive me." I turned on my side, towards him so we were basically face-to-face, his arm still under me, and rubbed my hand along his rough cheek. I pressed my cheek against his, nuzzling his neck, resting the top of my lips in the nape of his neck. It certainly got a reaction from him, startling him, but he settled down when he realized it was me.

"Revan.. I-" He started to speak, but I cut him off.

"Shh. Don't say a thing.. I missed you, Flyboy. I missed you a lot. My dreams were often filled with you and me, like this." I remembered dreaming about waking up in his arms, like it all had been a dream. "Oh, I missed you so much, Flyboy." My eyes watered, and I felt myself sobbing. He softly laughed at me, a handsome smile lighting his face. He lifted me up, draping me across his lap, hugging my waist close to him, letting me cry openly. Its so nice having someone just.. Be there. He stroaked my back, trying to get me to calm down and... It worked. My sobs stopped after a while, and then it was just me and him, holding each other.

"Beautiful, about that woman.. I never meant to.. Its just.. I don't know how I can explain without sounding foolish.." I put my finger to my lips, making him hush.

"I don't care about it. Your here with me, and you don't know how happy I am." I snuggled closer to him.

"Believe me Gorgeous, I know exactly how you feel." He pulled me to the side of him so we could both lay down again. I sighed happily. I couldn't be happier. I was proved wrong a few minutes later.

We were interrupted about five minutes later by Atton and Jen, coming in with the rest. I smiled at them, and closed my eyes, drawing myself closer to Carth.

"I'm sorry, Flyboy, Jenna must have torn you up at the restaurant." I smiled a bit.

"Don't worry about it, Gorgeous. I was actually more interested in that little girl. Her resemblance to you is remarkable.." He thought a moment, but I looked up at him playfully and he gave me a confused smile, furrowing his brow. I winked at Jen, who made them wait with her at the entrance of the room until I had my time with Carth. She winked back.

Carth must have seen this, because he got even more confused. "Okay, who is that little girl?"

"Can you keep a secret?" Excitement was bubbling up from my core, I wanted to tell him, but I was sort of worried about what his reaction would be. Would he love her like I did? Or would he reject her?

He smiled flirtingly and gave me one of his famous 'looks'. "Of course I can, beautiful. Its my specialty." He smiled playfully back at me, and I giggled.

"Alright." I lifted my head to his ear, kissing his mouth and cheek on the way. I stopped as soon as I got to his ear, and whispered it low. "She is my daughter, Carth Onasi. Her name is Alora." I felt confusion inside him, but excitement soon taking its place. He sobered quickly.

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Carth

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'Wow! Revan having a child.. That's terrific!' Realization dawned on me, as I wondered who the father was. Had Revan truly stayed true to me? I shot her a look of question, and she giggled at me. She motioned for someone to come over here, and I realized it was the little girl. What was I supposed to do? The little girl walked over shyly, her hands clasped tight behind her back, her chin down. 'She is so adorable,' I thought.

"Carth, I would like you to meet Allie. Allie, I'd like you to meet Carth." Revan grinned at me. Allie blushed. At least I could say hey to her.

"Hello, Allie. I take it that it is short for Alora?" I asked. The little girl nodded, a small grin creeping up on her face.

"Wow, such a pretty name." Allie giggled. Revan got up and stood next to her daughter. A small pang of hurt pulled at my heart, I was oblivious to who the father was. I watched as Revan lovingly kneeled down and straightened Allie's pink skirt, and straightened the bottom of her blouse.

"You know, Carth, her name isn't just Alora, you know." Revan looked up from her daughter, to me, her violet eyes glistening.

"Oh? What is her whole name?" I decided it was best to just play along. I didn't know where Revan was taking this, but wherever she was leading the conversation I didn't care. I was just glad to have her home.

"Her whole name? Allie, could you please tell Carth your whole name?" Revan beamed at her daughter. Her daughter's back stiffened, she straightened her head up, and flattened her nostrils superiorly.

"Well. My whole entire name is Alora Ashley Onasi." A proud, broad smile appeared on her small little delicate face. I was taken aback. Alora was my child.

"You know, she is very proud of her name. I think it suits her just fine, don't you, Carth?" Revan asked me. The same smile Allie had on her face crept up on hers, and I was still surprised. My eyes grew wide. I think Revan took this sign the wrong way, and she panicked a bit. I ignored her stuttering and I took her into my arms, and kissed her. It wasn't a very long kiss, but I put all my emotions into it. Happiness, gratefulness, love, everything I was experiencing. A smile played on her lips, even as we kissed. She was the one that broke the kiss first. We panted for a minute. "So.. You.. You like Alora?" Revan managed to get out through pants. I shook my head.

"Revan, how could I like her, when I love her?" Revan smiled approvingly at me, and knelt down next to Allie, who was watching us both closely. She looked into her mothers eyes.

"Baby girl, remember when you were smaller, and you used to ask about who your real daddy was?" Revan asked. The girl nodded slowly, unsure.

"Well, Baby, this man," She motioned to me. "Is your true daddy. I love him very much, I hope you will too." Revan smiled lovingly. Allie looked up to me with big eyes, unbelieving eyes. A tear slid down her precious cheek and she ran up to me and jumped into my arms with such force it nearly toppled me over. I hugged her close, holding my baby girl for the first time. I sobbed in my baby's shoulder.

"Daddy.. Whats wrong?" She asked, leaning back to see my face. She looked confused, her brow furrowing at me.

"Nothing is wrong, Angel. But I need to get to a ceremony." I smiled. Revan's flashed a look of confusion at me.

"What is the ceremony for, daddy?" Allie was the one to ask.

I looked into my baby girl's bright violet eyes, and smiled. "I was just crowned the 'Most Happiest Man in the Universe'."

Revan started crying from where she stood, and she ran over to where me and Alora were, and I held her as well. Between sobs, Revan choked out: "But.. You're still the 'Most Handsomest Man in the Universe'. She giggled, choking on happy tears, and I held her and Alora closer.

I had the two loves of my life, my two girls, my greatest joys, in my arms. Nothing, could be happier than this. My happiest memories flashed before my eyes, the first time I kissed Revan, the time where I proclaimed my love for her.. The first night we were first together. The night we spent on Manaan, looking out into the Oceans as the sun set. The day Dustil told me he was proud to be my son. I locked this one memory away, held it close to my heart, as I did all my other precious memory.

Every day with my little girl and Revan, was now a precious memory.

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The End

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*crying*Oh... so sad and so happy. :)
I started sobbing at this point:

His eyes looked deep into mine, searching them. It was like he was questioning my love for him. I could feel him, it was like he was peeking into my core. I couldn't bear it, the pain.. This man had my heart in his hands.

:sniffle:Oh... and here:

"I don't want to loose you, you are too important to me, Beautiful. At least.. At least take me with you." He pleaded.

I love you too Carth!!!!*sobs* I know my review is long... but this part also very deeply touched me:

I wish it could have been a different way. I wish a different person could have this responsibility. I would give anything.. Anything.. Just to stay with you. But we know it can't be like that. I can't take you with me, I will be in constant danger.. We both know that if you die, I have a greater chance at falling. I promise I will come back. Someday. I willl return. I can't live without you, Flyboy. I.. I love you so much." I tried to smile a bit, and turned my head back to face him. "I have made this promise to you, and I will never break it. But.. I need you to make me a promise." He literally froze in his place, stilled by my doing. He stood unmoving by the Force Stasis I laid on him. Tears fell freely down my cheeks as I looked into his eyes. "I want you to promise me that you will keep the Republic strong. At least until I return. Find another love, if possible.." The tears that fell from my eyes soon fell from his, falling gingerly the side of his cheek. I brushed them away, rubbing my palm on his cheek and jaw, where I rested the tip of my hand. "But never forget.. I will always love you, and you alone." I hugged him close, pecked his lips once, then turned to my bag.

*falls to knees crying* Here too:

"No other woman.. I love you, and you alone. I will wait a life time. Oh, Force, I'll wait two life times, just come back to me in one piece. I'll be waiting. I love you, oh, Force, I love you so much. Goodbye, Revan."

And here:

Wait a little while longer, my love. I'll keep true to my promise.'

I know my review is long but this was a happy, very happy moment:

"Well. My whole entire name is Alora Ashley Onasi." A proud, broad smile appeared on her small little delicate face. I was taken aback. Alora was my child.

"You know, she is very proud of her name. I think it suits her just fine, don't you, Carth?" Revan asked me. The same smile Allie had on her face crept up on hers, and I was still surprised. My eyes grew wide. I think Revan took this sign the wrong way, and she panicked a bit. I ignored her stuttering and I took her into my arms, and kissed her. It wasn't a very long kiss, but I put all my emotions into it. Happiness, gratefulness, love, everything I was experiencing. A smile played on her lips, even as we kissed. She was the one that broke the kiss first. We panted for a minute. "So.. You.. You like Alora?" Revan managed to get out through pants. I shook my head.

"Revan, how could I like her, when I love her?" Revan smiled approvingly at me, and knelt down next to Allie, who was watching us both closely. She looked into her mothers eyes.

"Baby girl, remember when you were smaller, and you used to ask about who your real daddy was?" Revan asked. The girl nodded slowly, unsure.

"Well, Baby, this man," She motioned to me. "Is your true daddy. I love him very much, I hope you will too." Revan smiled lovingly. Allie looked up to me with big eyes, unbelieving eyes. A tear slid down her precious cheek and she ran up to me and jumped into my arms with such force it nearly toppled me over. I hugged her close, holding my baby girl for the first time. I sobbed in my baby's shoulder.

*crys* And the end :sniffle: oh so, so happy:

I locked this one memory away, held it close to my heart, as I did all my other precious memory.

Every day with my little girl and Revan, was now a precious memory.

Oh... you are a fantastic writer and the only critism here is that you might need to look into a beta reader... just some spelling errors. ;)

Starr :D

Oh, thanks so much Starr! I was so nervous about this, I didn't know if it would be good enough >.> Thank you thank you thank you! *gasp gasp* THANK YOU! :D

Hehehe, it's okay. Thanks! I dunno.. I haven't thought about it.. I didn't think I was a good writer, so I didn't plan on anymore.... >.> I might, when I'm not writing on my other story :D

OMG! That was sooo beautiful!!! It was absolutely beautiful!!
You are such a skilled writer!!!
RR

I agree with everything Starr Revan said above. I also suggest a beta reader, or just running it through a spelling/grammar checker on a computer.

I like the OCs you added (Jacob/Jaden) and your Exile and Atton thrown in, as well. The dark Jedi's sudden appearance was a little out of place. Maybe a common mugger, which she didn't notice because she was so upset, would make more sense?

Other than that, it was excellent! It inspired emotion, made me want to keep reading, and I really enjoyed it!!!

*jawdropping* This is really good!!!

Keep coming? Pretty please?

To be posted 16 Nov 2007 on

To be posted 16 Nov 2007 on StarwarsKnights under The Critic returns and Lucasforums under the Critic’s Two Cents.

 

 

Because I find that a lot of the writing here is already what I would define as professional standard, I will tag those I liked as pick of the week. Check at StarwarsKnights for the best of the best. 

Approximately one year after TSL: Revan has a surprise for Carth when she returns from the Outer Rim.  And gets one in return.

 Some word usage problems haft instead of have, but that might be merely how you heard it; course (path) instead of coarse (Rough). You also forgot conversation breaks. All that said, the work is excellent. The story, starting from when she left to after her return was full of the angst you would expect, and the love you anticipate. Very well done  A pick of this week from KFM.

Updated Version

The update version can be found here http://mischief-maker07.deviantart.com/art/Coming-Home-LSF-RevanxCarth-58490372, on deviantart. Thanks for looking!

Hey, I forgot to mention that, too...Please do write some more. Your profile says

'Cause I know I am a bad writer X.x

That's not true!! As I told DarthBubbles, "no self doubt!" The worst that can happen is some people (us) on the 'net don't like it. So? Writing improves with practice. Not suggesting you need practice, but I think we all benefit every time we write something, regardless of what it is. BTW, I had to come back and read it again because I liked it that much. It's great! :)

I look forward to reading more! (That's a request, by the way. More please??)

I thought that was a very good take. Like what another said though, I would stringly suggest you have someone beta your pieces. There were spelling errors and wrong words used like loose instead of lose. Too many of those can detract a reader. However the overall premise is good.

Holy smooshkabobs, that was awseome!!! The emotion you have put into this story is almost unbelievablely good. I really really like this one. (smooshkabobs???where did that come from?) It's always a good plan to carefully review your stuff, maybe slamming it into WORD for spelling, and such, before u submit. Other than that, I am putting this into my wittle stash to keep. (and that is a real compliment :wink: )

*sobs* That was great! You are very talented - I hope you'll write more!!

PS - Gosh, you sure do portray Carth perfectly!!! :D

*Dances* Wooooo!!! I didn't think I was a good writer.. But wow!!! :O! Anyways, I am looking into getting a Beta reader... And I am writing another story.. I just don't know if I'll keep it.. Stay on the lookout for it!!!! Okay!?!?!?!?!?! Lol.. I scare myself sometimes. Sorry. XD

Hey I couldn't find your email so I'll just tell you here...

I'm going to be leaving to go to San Fran for about a week. If you post anything in that time I want you to know that I didn't forget about you I'm simply not here. I'll post on all of your work as soon as I get back.

Starr

Is it weird to read your own work? x:

That sweet! such a delicate story!
I could not imagine a better end for my preferred characters!
I'm looking forward to read another job! :D

(please...forgive me for my awful english ^_^)

Just came to tell you I'm back... have been back for a while actually and haven't seen you. :(

I wished you had posted another story... this one was so great. I am deticating my upcoming chapter of TPWT, As She Leaves, to it. :D

Starr

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